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Some people think that environmental problems should be solved on a global scale while others believe it is better to deal with them nationally.

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It is believed by a handful of persons that the ecological issues should be resolved at a worldwide
level
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 others think it is likely that it is prominent to approach them domestically. As the repercussions of the green issues are impacting detrimentally throughout the world irrespective of the region, I am of the opinion that it should be handled at
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 scale. On the one hand, the adverse effects of our biosphere
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 as the greenhouse effect, deforestation, droughts and various other natural disasters lead to a lot of unpleasant and difficult experiences for the life and property of people which need to be taken care
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 the global authorities through directing people to conserve our mother nature. Since humans from all over the world are affected by the hassles of the biosphere, they should be addressed on an international basis
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 my point of view.
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, there are a set of sustainable development goals produced by
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 Nations Conference in 2012 for the purpose of the greater resolution of environmental challenges universally.
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, a set of men and women are convinced by the fact that it is
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 to clear up the matters of the
eco system
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 at the country
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. Most probably
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 could be
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 the convenience of handling it at the state
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 followed by lesser barriers to it
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 as language, culture, religion and geopolitical factors.
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 as
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 is being taken at the inland stage would lengthen the time taken to action the remedies,
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 the issues will persist for some time which in turn affect the standard of living of people to be poor.
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 the national environmental authority has introduced a set of regulations related to
environment
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, these are neglected by laymen and no one is bothered about it in a bureaucratic government. To sum it up, I think undoubtedly it is wiser to find solutions to the problems of
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 at a universal
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 since the impact of them
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 universal too.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • international cooperation
  • sovereign rights
  • Paris Agreement
  • climate change
  • ocean pollution
  • collective measures
  • economic interests
  • political will
  • enforcement issues
  • free-riders
  • tailor-made solutions
  • transboundary pollution
  • resource constraints
  • global frameworks
  • national efforts
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