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The given line graph provides information for the percentage of changes in prices of three metals in comparison with
previous
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 month over the months of 2014.
Overall
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, during
a
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 year
Nickel
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 saw the biggest change and
Copper
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 experienced the lowest change. In the first month, the average price of
Nickel
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 increased by 6% compared with
previous
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 month,
while
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Zinc
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 and
Copper
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 saw a slight growth of 1% and 2%, respectively. From January to May, all three metals increased moderately, after which they saw a fall of 3% in
Nickel
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 and about 1%
for
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Zinc
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 and
Copper
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. Between July and September, the changes
remined
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remained
 constant in all metals.
In particular
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, Both
Nickel
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 and
Zinc
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 decreased
of
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 about 1% and
Copper
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 went up by 1% monthly. In October, trends of changes were constant,
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however
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 over the next 2 months, their prices increased again (
Nickel
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 and
Copper
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 increased by about 1% and
Zinc
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 saw a rise of about 2%).
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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