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Write a letter to your manager to nominate a person for best employee of the year award. Who is this person Why did you choose him? What is the characteristic of a good employee?

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Dear Mr. Bond, I am writing to nominate
Javad
 Khimar from the Networking Unit for the Employee of the Year Award, as I believe he has demonstrated outstanding dedication and greatly supported our team’s success. Given his consistent hard work and willingness to go beyond his regular responsibilities, I feel he is highly deserving of
this
 award.
Javad
 not only meets his own tasks with efficiency
,
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 but
also
 frequently assists other team members, which has significantly strengthened our team’s
overall
 performance.
Javad
 is very dedicated to his job and always tries his best.
Also
, He completes work on time and often helps others in the group. In fact, one main reason I chose him is because he is very supportive and friendly, and always shares useful ideas with the group.
Moreover
, He tries that increase his knowledge for productivity.
Finally
, I believe a good employee is someone who works well with others, is reliable, expert and cares about the job.
Javad
 has all these qualities and has been very helpful in the Hotel Hilton project, which helped our team succeed. Thank you for your attention to
this
 matter. Best regards, Mohsen Ijbari IT Manager
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task achievement
Consider providing specific examples or achievements to strengthen the nomination.
coherence and cohesion
Try to avoid starting sentences with 'Also' in formal writing. Use a more formal transition, such as 'Additionally' or 'Furthermore.'
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a well-organized structure with a clear introduction and closing.
task achievement
Polite and professional tone throughout the letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Nomination
  • Employee of the Year
  • Work ethic
  • Dedication
  • Contribution
  • Accomplishments
  • Team player
  • Positive impact
  • Company culture
  • Leadership
  • Inspirational
  • Exceptional service
  • Recognition
  • Commendable
  • Exemplary performance
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