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It is too expensive to look after and repair old building .Tho money should spend on building new modern buildings instead .To what extent do you agree or disagree.

#repair #tho #money #buildings
It is argued that we
shold
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should
 not spend
money
 on old
house
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houses
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 or buildings because it will be more costly. I totally agree with
this
 statement and I will explain in
this
 essay what are the reasons for that. On the
first
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other
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 hand, old buildings are weak
in
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from
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 every angle.
Furthermore
,
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the buildings
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buildings
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building's
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 pillar is
main
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the main
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 structure of
building
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a building
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 if the
pillar
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ispillar
waspillar
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 weak every part of the
infastructure
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infrastructure
 will
useless
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be useless
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.
For example
, my friend had
very
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a very
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 old
house
 and he was trying to repair that because that was his
familly
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family
house
 so he started to rebuild. later he
think
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thought
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 he
did
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had made
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mistake
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a mistake
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 because
to
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apply
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only for repaint that will cost him around half of the
house
 price. Which cost was only for paint so later he
decide
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decided
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 to
distroy
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destroy
 that
house
 and build
new
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a new
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 one. On the
second
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other
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 hand, we should take care of our old and
anciant
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ancient
building
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buildings
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 because
this
 is
our
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the
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 history of our
county
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country
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which is priceless. It is our
country
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country's
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 prestige and
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the simble
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simble
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simple
 of our older
familliese
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families
member
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members
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. Some people say that but I think
instead
 of spending
money
in
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on
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 useless
building
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buildings
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 we should build new and modern infrastructure in our society or country. reason for that even if we rebuild our old building
latter
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later
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 soon we need to again repair and spend
money
 so that we should make new building
instead
 old building maintain. In conclusion, we need to stop spending
money
in
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on
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 old
house
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houses
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 or
building
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buildings
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.
Instead
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,Instead
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distroy
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destroy
 them and make new
one
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ones
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 with modern style
wich
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which
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 looks very
atractive
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attractive
 and beautiful.
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