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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual ’ income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual ’ income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The presented bar chart illustrates the figures of households in terms of five separate ranges of annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015.
Overall
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, all the sectors did not experience a significant change through these 8 years.
Moreover
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, surprisingly, employees with 75000 to 99999 dollars had the lowest number of
houses
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 in the 3 reported years.
According to
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 the bar chart, the group with the highest wage started the period in the region of 29
million
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houses
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 and after a trifling decrease in 2011, they experienced a 7
million
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 rise to 33
million
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 in 2015.
Moreover
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, individuals with 25 to 49999 hundred dollars yearly income were the second most households at the beginning of the period with 26
million
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. Fascinatingly, they bought 6
million
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houses
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 in the next 4 years and overtook the first place
however
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 they had a minor decrease by 2
million
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 and lost their place
at the end
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.
In addition
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 to
this
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, the 2 lowest income sectors had the same pattern and they started with 25 and 27
million
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houses
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 and they finished at 27 and 28
million
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 respectively.
On the other hand
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, the second group in terms of annual salary were the lowest householders and their figure was in the range of 14 to 15
million
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houses
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words houses, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household distribution
  • income brackets
  • annual income
  • percentage change
  • trend analysis
  • income group
  • significant increase/decrease
  • steady growth/decline
  • fluctuations
  • compared to
  • in contrast
  • notably
  • median income
  • poverty line
  • economic factors
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