Some people think technology development decreases crime, while others believe it actually encourages crimes. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Technology is making a difference in today's world, so few people say that its growth decreases crime, whilst others feel that it improves the crime rate. In

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of the essay. It is true that advancements in technology will make people's lives easier and more comfortable. With the booming ,automation there is more privacy for everyone in day-to-day life, and there is less chance of intruders attacking the public's personal information. There was a lot of advancement in cybersecurity, and people are being aware of

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the increase in malware attacks.

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, in social media apps, WhatsApp there is end-to-end encryption, so without ,authentication no one can get the information.

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, With the expansion of innovation, there are some loopholes for everything through which criminals can find a way to attack. Criminals can install malware and viruses in the victim's systems without their permission.

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year by clicking on a link which she received through her mail from an anonymous person, and they demanded cash in return. Taking everything into consideration,

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rapid growth in automation there are a lot of crimes happening in the world. Everyone should be aware of these unlawful acts and in order to do that they have to gain knowledge about these and act

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Your essay addresses the topic, but your response could be more comprehensive. Your opinion at the end of the essay is not clearly stated.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 6.0

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