In some part of the world, the rate of divorce has increased dramatically over the past few decades. Explain possible reason for this problem and suggest some solution.

Globally couple divorce become
serious
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issue
on
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in
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few
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a few
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countries. It is believed by
few
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a few
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individuals that there
is
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has been
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rise
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a rise
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on
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in
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rate
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the rate
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of divorce cases
specially
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in
previous
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the previous
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few years.
This
essay will discuss the main problem associated with
this
and propose some solutions to alleviate it.
Reason
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behind
this
cause is depleting
work life
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work-life
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balance of working couples and gender equality. To explain it
further
, around the world
due to
rise
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in
cost
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the cost
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of living, most
of
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apply
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families
both male and females start earning to run their life which ultimately affects their working
hours
. People do overtime and
part time
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part-time
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jobs for longer
hours
.
For example
, Recently United
nations
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publish
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published
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report
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a report
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stated
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stating
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that couple separation doubled
than
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in
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the
last
20 years
due to
improper working
hours
.
Moreover
, gender equality
also
contributed much on top of it. Most of the global companies hiring
female
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females
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same as
male
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males
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,
caused
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causing
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more
female’s
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female to
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start working.
Hence
, couples
unable
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are unable
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to spend time together. Despite
above
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causes to tackle
this
problem, there are
plethora
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a plethora
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of possible measures to overcome
this
condition. One
of
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is for
healthy
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the healthy
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family life of
employee
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employees
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,
company
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the company
a company
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could consider
to provide
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providing
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three
days
off
instead
of two
days
. To elaborate
it
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more,
currently
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,currently
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most
of
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the
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apply
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companies globally have two
days
off like Saturday and Sunday,
families
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with families
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returning late and
sometime
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sometimes
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works
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working
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on Saturday
due to
extra work. Which
reduce
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reduces
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their spending time with their
families
.
In addition
,
extra
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an extra
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day off helps couples to plan small
trip
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trips
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to off from work.
Hence
, It
increase
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increases
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their relationship bonding and reduces their conflicts.
For instance
, Google,
face-book
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facebook
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and Mirco-soft companies
this
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apply
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started with
three
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a
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days
off option in
USA
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the USA
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in order to support
families
. In conclusion, Married
people
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people's
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separation can
reduce
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be reduced
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by maintaining office
hours
and family
hours
. The best solution to
this
problem is to regulate an extra off on top of
two
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a
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days
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two-day
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weekend.
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