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In some part of the world, the rate of divorce has increased dramatically over the past few decades. Explain possible reason for this problem and suggest some solution.

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Globally couple divorce become
serious
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 issue
on
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in
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few
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a few
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 countries. It is believed by
few
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a few
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 individuals that there
is
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has been
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rise
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a rise
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on
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in
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rate
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the rate
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 of divorce cases
specially
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especially
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 in
previous
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the previous
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 few years.
This
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 essay will discuss the main problem associated with
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 and propose some solutions to alleviate it.
Reason
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The reason
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 behind
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 cause is depleting
work life
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work-life
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 balance of working couples and gender equality. To explain it
further
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, around the world
due to
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rise
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the rise
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 in
cost
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the cost
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 of living, most
of
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apply
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families
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 both male and females start earning to run their life which ultimately affects their working
hours
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. People do overtime and
part time
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part-time
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 jobs for longer
hours
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.
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, Recently United
nations
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publish
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published
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report
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a report
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stated
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stating
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 that couple separation doubled
than
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in
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 the
last
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 20 years
due to
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 improper working
hours
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.
Moreover
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, gender equality
also
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 contributed much on top of it. Most of the global companies hiring
female
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females
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 same as
male
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males
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,
caused
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causing
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 more
female’s
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female to
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 start working.
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, couples
unable
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are unable
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 to spend time together. Despite
above
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the above
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 causes to tackle
this
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 problem, there are
plethora
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a plethora
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 of possible measures to overcome
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 condition. One
of
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is for
healthy
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the healthy
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 family life of
employee
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employees
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,
company
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the company
a company
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 could consider
to provide
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providing
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 three
days
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 off
instead
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 of two
days
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. To elaborate
it
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apply
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more,
currently
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,currently
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 most
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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companies globally have two
days
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 off like Saturday and Sunday,
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families
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with families
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 returning late and
sometime
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sometimes
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works
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working
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 on Saturday
due to
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 extra work. Which
reduce
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reduces
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 their spending time with their
families
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.
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,
extra
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an extra
the extra
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 day off helps couples to plan small
trip
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trips
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 to off from work.
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, It
increase
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 their relationship bonding and reduces their conflicts.
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, Google,
face-book
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facebook
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 and Mirco-soft companies
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this
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apply
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started with
three
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a
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days
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 off option in
USA
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the USA
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 in order to support
families
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. In conclusion, Married
people
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people's
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 separation can
reduce
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be reduced
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 by maintaining office
hours
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 and family
hours
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. The best solution to
this
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 problem is to regulate an extra off on top of
two
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a
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days
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two-day
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 weekend.
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