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The graph below gives information abouth the percentage of population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

The graph below gives information abouth the percentage of population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.
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The presented graph represents the rates of people residing in towns of four countries in Asia for 50 years and the expected population for another 20 years till the year 2040. The four countries are the Philippines, Malaysia, Thailand and Indonesia. It is clearly seen that Malayasia shows
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 Thailand has the lowest amount of citizens in cities. As
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is represented above, 14% of Indonesians preferred staying in the capital in 1970 compared to 50% in 2040. It can be observed that their fondness for metropolises has increased over time and only half of the people will live in the countryside by 2040.
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, Malaysians love municipals and by 2040 more than 80% will move there.
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, around 68% of Philippine civilians embraced villages in 1970.
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, in 1990 it shows a peak of 50% in major business locations. After 1990, for 20 years the trend was a downward one and fell
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 40%.
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, it depicts a steady increase from 1990 and is expected to reach 55% by 2040.
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, Thailandians
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 to embrace country living in 1970 and more than 80% lived there. The fluctuation is considerably low by 2040 for Thailand and a minority of them shift to a municipality despite the majority staying in small suburbs.

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