IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 6

In many countries, the cost of living is rising. What are the effects of this on individuals and society. Suggest solutions to this problem.

#countries #cost #effects #individuals #society
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
Living cost is one of the most essential factors that affect how we live our lives. In
this
Linking Words
 essay, I will discuss how an increase in living expenses impacts both people and society
as well as
Linking Words
 give some advice to solve
this
Linking Words
 issue.
Firstly
Linking Words
 , rental and accommodation costs will go up
due to
Linking Words
inflation
Use synonyms
as a result
Linking Words
 many households with low income will not be able to afford the rose and become homeless. Research from the UK indicated that more than 50% of low-income households have difficulties on paying their rental when
inflation
Use synonyms
 is high.
Secondly
Linking Words
 , the problems of the society arise when people become homeless. Most of the crimes were committed by the homeless
as a result
Linking Words
 the community may need to put more resources into the safety of the city. To deal with the increase in living costs, setting a ceiling of rental for those low-income should be an ideal method. With fewer homeless , the criminal rate should
also
Linking Words
 be decreased.
Moreover
Linking Words
, the government should come up with a minimum wage that correlates with the
inflation
Use synonyms
 rate .
For example
Linking Words
 , when
inflation
Use synonyms
 is 5% , the minimum wage should at least go up by 5% in order to let the labourers survive when the cost of living increases. In conclusion , when living costs increase , more people will become homeless and
as a consequence
Linking Words
Add a comma
,
show examples
society may suffer from the criminal rate . To minimize the effect of
inflation
Use synonyms
 , the government should implement
a
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
maximum rental and minimum wages.
Submitted by sherwoodchan1218 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: