The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given line charts illustrate the trends of
households
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are
owning Unnecessary verb
apply
electronical
appliances and the total time spent of them are doing housework every week from 1920 to 2019 in a country.
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electrical
electronic
Overall
, over almost a decade, the proportion of all electrical appliances Linking Words
were
owned by Unnecessary verb
apply
households
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was
experienced Unnecessary verb
apply
a
growth, Remove the article
apply
while
the total hours of housework Linking Words
were
done Unnecessary verb
apply
was
declined.
The biggest Unnecessary verb
apply
percentages
of Fix the agreement mistake
percentage
households
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in
owning electrical appliances Change preposition
apply
was
contributed by washing Change the verb form
were
machine
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machines
started
at 40% in 1920, and the graph experienced a Wrong verb form
starting
fluctuate
trend until 2019 to 72%. Change the verb form
fluctuating
Furthermore
, at the beginning of the period, vacuum Linking Words
cleaner
began at 30%, Fix the agreement mistake
cleaners
while
none of Linking Words
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households
Add an article
the households
were owning
Wrong verb form
owned
refrigerator
. Fix the agreement mistake
refrigerators
Then
, vacuum Linking Words
cleaner
faced a significant increase to 100% in 2000. Meanwhile, Fix the agreement mistake
cleaners
refrigerator
rose notably to 100% in 1980. Fix the agreement mistake
refrigerators
In addition
, the ownership of vacuum Linking Words
cleaner
and Fix the agreement mistake
cleaners
refrigerator
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refrigerators
were remained
at the exact same number until 2019.
Moving onto the second chart, Change to the active voice
remained
households
Use synonyms
were
doing housework started at 50% in the first period before facing a significant decline of 30% in the next Unnecessary verb
apply
fourty
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forty
four
year
. Afterwards, the graph experienced a gradual decrease to 10% over fifty-nine years.Fix the agreement mistake
years
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