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Some people believe that eventually all jobs will be done by artificially intelligent robots

People will be progressively replaced by artificially smart
robots
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 in
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the majority
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 of
jobs
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 sooner or later.
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 menial
of
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jobs
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 can be taken in the future by
robots
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, there will be
jobs
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 done by human
labor
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. Eventually, all
jobs
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 that are tough and exhausting for humans will be done by
robots
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. Humans are creatures that want everything to be easier and require less effort for themselves. I am an example of
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 myself. In my daily life,
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 of writing my lessons by hand, I put
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them forward
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 using
computer
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the computer
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.
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,
robots
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 do
jobs
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 more effectively compared to people. The result of
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 is that many companies turn to artificial intelligence because it is far more worthwhile than human
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. In yards in Germany,
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, gardeners have been replaced by automatic
robots
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. For these reasons,
robots
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 will be more useful in the future.
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, there will be
jobs
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 that cannot taken place by
robots
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 because their capacity will not be enough
for replacing
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to replace
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 humans in some
jobs
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. Human nature has a huge advantage over
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. They have feelings, unlike
robots
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. Some
jobs
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 should be done with emotions,
feelings
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and feelings
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.
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, acting.
Robots
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 will never be able to show powerful acting in films or TV series. In conclusion, there is
high
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 possibility that most
jobs
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 may be taken by smart
robots
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 in the future. Despite
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, I believe that human skills will always be needed.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • artificial intelligence (AI)
  • automation
  • robotics
  • futuristic developments
  • analyze data
  • analytical precision
  • human capabilities
  • emotional intelligence
  • human interaction
  • human oversight
  • strategic decision-making
  • nuances of human judgment
  • technological landscape
  • intrinsic human qualities
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