The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.

The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.
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The line chart displays how many enquiries were obtained by the Tourist Information Office in one town during the 6 months in 2011.
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, what stands out from the graph is that there was a considerable upward trend in person and by phone,
whereas
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letters and email experienced a substantial failure over a period. By telephone was the biggest request in January with just under 1000 and decreased considerably in the next
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to exactly 800.
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, it increased gradually and accounted for 1000 and it remained stable in one
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. But, by telephone rose consistently in other months to precisely 1600. In-person was the lowest
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send requests at the start of the period at around 400, but sharply climbed to nearly 800, before increasing consumption dramatically to become the highest consumer to just below 1800 in June. By letter and email began the enquiries received with almost 800 and there was a fluctuation during the
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of January and Match.
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, a remarkable decline from
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to
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just under 400 in June.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
Vocabulary: Replace the words month with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "considerable" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • enquiries
  • Tourist Information Office
  • in person
  • by letter/email
  • by telephone
  • general trend
  • six-month period
  • significant increase
  • steady rise
  • decline
  • peak
  • fluctuations
  • monthly data
  • comparison
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