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Many social media accounts are fake. What problems does this cause? What solutions can you suggest?

#media #accounts
Smart phone
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 is the biggest place for social connectivity. It is believed by
few
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a few
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 individuals that the mostly social
media
 accounts
are not authenticate
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.
This
 essay will discuss the main problem associated with
this
, and propose some solutions to alleviate it. The reason behind
this
 cause is social platforms are allowing multiple accounts under a single identity of
person
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a person
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 irrespective of verifying documents.
Otherwise
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this
 will
leads
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 to
rise
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a rise
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 in cybercrime and plenty of real
user
 can lose their identity. To explain it
further
, the success of social
media
 service
provider
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providers
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 totally depends on
number
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the number
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of subscriber
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subscriber
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subscribers
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 they have.
Moreover
, To increase the account
usually
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this
 type of
platforms
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platform
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 rarely checks,
instead
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instead,
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they
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it
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 allows to generate as many as any individual can.
For instance
, Tik-Tok, since launch they
dont
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do not
 have many users, so by looking depleting trend they allowed multiple duplicate
id
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IDs
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. Despite the above causes to tackle
this
 problem, there are a plethora of measures to overcome
this
 condition. One of the best
way
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ways
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 is to initialize
process
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the process
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 of identification of
individual
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the individual
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user
 through their official identity documents.
In other words
, companies
who
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that
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 mainly
running
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run
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 social
media
 must run
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the know
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know your customer
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Know Your Customer
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 or
user
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User
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 program.
For example
, Elon
musk
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Musk
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 after taking over
twitter
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Twitter
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 immediately took
first
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the first
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 action of implementing to get
blue
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a blue
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 tick by purchasing
nominal
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a nominal
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 plan by submitting supporting documents. Which ultimately helps to differentiate between fake and real
account
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accounts
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. In conclusion, Social
media
due to
 unidentified accounts
become
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becomes
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open
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an open
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 ground for scammers to
do cheating
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. The solution to
this
 problem is
true
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a true
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 check for each and every
user
 who
subscribe
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subscribes
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their
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to their
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 services.
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  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

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  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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