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Some people believe that culture will be ruined if it is used to earn tourism revenue, but others consider that tourism is the only way of protecting culture. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Culture
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 is the mirror of the
country
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 It can indicate the way to live in that nation. Citizens have different sights about
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 business protecting or having negative impacts on civilization which is growing for
tourism
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. From my standpoint,
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 it can cause some pessimistic effects on our
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 it offers more advantages in another view.
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 with, there is a strong argument that
tourism
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 is demolishing
culture
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 just
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 the profit. The first objective which we can not ignore is tourists from other places. Cultural heritages are icons for the
country
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,
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, some people do not have good awareness.
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, travellers even have irresponsible behaviours
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 as littering, drawing or causing harm to objects. In terms of the nation, to efforts to demand of traveller, food and festivals held a lot of in every single place and it can attract tourists,
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 cause damage to the unique of
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.
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, profit from that has made people not taking it seriously.
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, it is undeniable that the touristry industry brings many positive impacts on
culture
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. When the tourists visit anywhere, they will learn and know more about the history, and customs and discover specialities. After the journey, they can tell others about that
country
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 or their experience at that destination. Because of visitor attractions, it can help
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 develop.
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,
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 way can help to raise the budget of the government, so they can use that money to satisfy necessities for the
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. Traversing is becoming to key to maintaining
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civilization in that way. In conclusion, it is clear to see the advantages and disadvantages of the
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 industry on civilization. Despite these reasons, I still believe that
tourism
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 can help the government to prosper the budget and help the nation’s works.

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