soem people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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There are differing views regarding the distribution of
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in the scientific field, world of business and academics. A group opine
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should be freely shared whilst
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think
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should not always be the case.
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essay seeks to look at both opinions. I will give my opinion in the course of my writing.
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with, in the field of research, it is said that people become more knowledgeable when they share
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.
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others
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may raise questions that will
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challenge the researchers to learn more and come up with even brilliant
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this
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can be extrapolated to include what happens in the business and academic world alike. All three fields have a common denominator which is they involve dealing with people. And, without letting out your
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, it won't be appreciated as people are only previewed to the
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they receive. I can
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understand why proponents are for sharing
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pertaining to all of these areas as in the end, it is for the benefit of humans.
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, I still think some
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should remain sacred.
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, the desire to be special is a thing every human being would like to be. There are numerous stories of how one researcher stole another's idea through communication and was fast enough to publish the idea so bears the name
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of the original inventor.
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, businesses thrive on uniqueness and are fundamentally run to generate profit. There is competition in the field of business.
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, when the authorities of one firm let out their
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to
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, they may lose their specificity and their customers to
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.
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resulting in money loss. For the aforementioned reasons, I agree that some
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is valuable and should not be shared freely.
To sum up
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, I agree that some
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are better kept to those who know and in the quest to share, they should be done judiciously.
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