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Many cities are now turning parks and farmland into new housing developments. Is this a positive or negative development?

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In recent years, there has been an increase in demand for building affordable housing for the increasing population in metropolitan
cities
. Various
cities
 are becoming concrete jungles by destroying farms and gardens to build new
houses
.
This
 essay will discuss both positive
as well as
 negative trends.
However
, the essay will illustrate why negative aspects outweigh positive ones. There is no denying that the housing crisis is a huge problem nowadays in all big
cities
 and to resolve that, building new infrastructure is the only way out.
According to
 one of the recent studies conducted by Yale University, Canada needs one million new
houses
 to be built by 2030, in order to match the supply and demand chain.
Moreover
, there is hardly any space left in big
cities
 to accommodate new infrastructure and because of
this
 construction companies are looking to transform farms into construction sites.
As a result
, we are now left with less than 20% of green land in the majority of the towns.
On the other hand
, we simply can not ignore the fact that the environment is in huge danger because of
this
 trend. Recent news published by THE TIMES mentions that there has been a significant increase in global temperature and a decreasing level of water all over the globe. The article
also
 showcases the current devastating situation in Antarctica where glaciers are melting at a very fast rate. Not only humans have to deal with
this
 but
also
 animals and birds are at huge risk of dying as their natural habitats are getting destroyed.
To conclude
,
this
 essay agrees that
although
 there are positive sides to building new
houses
, the drawbacks are far worse. Building new
houses
 is necessary but not at the cost of damaging our mother earth.
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task response
Your essay addresses both the positive and negative aspects of turning parks and farmland into new housing developments, providing a balanced view of the topic. However, to better address the prompt, ensure that you explicitly state your position (positive, negative, or balanced) in the introduction and provide a clear stance in the conclusion.
coherence cohesion
Your essay demonstrates good coherence and cohesion by organizing ideas logically and using cohesive devices effectively. To further improve, consider using more varied and sophisticated linking words and phrases to enhance the overall coherence of your essay.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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