The chart shows the top eight honeymoon destination for newlywed British couples in 2010. The results come from a survey of 5, 000 couples
The chart shows the top eight honeymoon destinations for newlywed British
couples
in 2010. The results come from a survey of 5, 000 Use synonyms
couples
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The chart represents the outcome of a study made on 5, 000 newly married duos in Britain in the year 2010 of eight topmost honeymoon destinations.
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, it is evident that Thailand and Bali were the most visited countries Linking Words
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Spain and the Lake District were the least toured.
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with, the number of newlyweds who visited Thailand and Bali from the total of Linking Words
couples
researched were 1,410 and 1,335 respectively making them the highest recording location for honeymoon. Use synonyms
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, these were followed by those preferring Costa Rica at 750 people and those patronizing the Maldives being 600 married people.
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, out of the 5,000 partners sampled, it turned out that the Lake District was the lowest of the nations explored for fun at just 124 of these people and 140 of the Spanish. Linking Words
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, freshly married who chose Paris as their destination for pleasure were 209. Linking Words
Finally
, the Greek Islands were patronized by 432 of these surveyed recently wedded Linking Words
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