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It is sometimes said that people should be encouraged to get married before they are 30, as this is best for the individual and the society. Do you agree or designee?

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Marriage
 is a big step for everyone. People in many societies encourage the youngest to get married before the age of 30. They believe that a woman must start her own family and have children before she turns 40. For others,
marriage
 should come only if you feel ready, with no age limitations. In my mind,
this
issue
 depends on everyone's beliefs, and people don't must VERB PROBLEM apply There may be a verb use
issue
 here. show examples have a plan or even a to-do list for things they have to do until a specific age.
Firstly
, I will start with the fact that nowadays, the youngest continue their after-school education for many years. They want to have a good educational and career path.
Although
 they do many studies for various years, they start their careers after their early thirties. They may have several relationships, but they only focus on making a good life. So the matter of
marriage
 isn't an
issue
, that they want to face early in their lives.
Secondly
, there is a social thought, which is coming from the elderly ones, that everybody needs to have a companion and make a family, for having kids and grandkids as they are young. In spite of that need, I strongly believe that everybody can have companions and kids without getting married. We are living in a new generation world, with no stereotypes and tabus. We don't have to look back at what our grandparents did in their years. Our societies need to have educated citizens, who can work and be productive. Nobody cares about your family status.
On the other hand
,
this
 is an
issue
 because people become estranged, and selfis. Raising their children with these manners. For the status of
marriage
 or not
marriage
, I believe that everyone knows which and when is the right time. But for passing to new generations ethics and values I strongly believe we are obliged. Closing, encouraged to get married before 30, has nothing to do with individual and society.
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