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An increasing number of people now are using the internet to meet other and socialize, some think this has brought people closer together while other think people are becoming more isolated. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Numerous individuals are now using the
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 to socialise, meet and date . some
people
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 think it brings citizens closer.
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 few humans believe that it cuts off
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 from their immediate surroundings . using the
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 too much isolates them from family members and real
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.
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 essay will discuss both views and present my opinion on
this
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. First and foremost, the
Internet
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 should be used for positive purposes. ,
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however
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people
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 use it for connecting with lost
friends
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, networking or dating. using the
internet
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 for socialising can prove perilous as online crimes are increasing.
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, they can be trolled
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 and cheated using the
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.
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, sites like Facebook and Instagram should be used with utmost precautions. I am of the opinion that the
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 should not be used for socialising.
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,
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 usage is well used to connect with the public and form friendships or relationships. It brings positive changes in society and harmony prevails among
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.
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,most
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 use the
internet
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 to communicate or express their feelings with
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. it brings them closer.
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 ,in ,India more communities use WhatsApp to chat and communicate with their
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 and relatives. The
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 makes the public friendlier and more social.
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 it can be used for socialising , the
internet
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 should not be used for meeting and socialising with others. In conclusion,
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 the
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 is a powerful technology . it has its own hazards, crimes like grooming, catfishing or trolling are common on the
internet
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. I am of the opinion that the
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 should not be used for socialising. One should always practice caution
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 using the
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 for socializing.
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task response
Provide a thorough analysis of both views and present a clear opinion at the beginning of the essay.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure a clear connection between ideas and paragraphs to improve the flow of the essay.
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