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The bar chart shows the number of times per week (in 1000s), over five weeks, that three computer packages were downloaded from the internet. ▪️Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the number of times per week (in 1000s), over five weeks, that three computer packages were downloaded from the internet. ▪️Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph illustrates some information about the downloaded data of three packages per
week
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 over the time period of 35 days.
Overall
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, the Java
package
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 downloading is considerably high over the time period.
While
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 very few people's choice is
net
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not
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 packages among the other two. Putting it in detail, in
week
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 2, the activeX, java and net
package
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downloads
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 rose to 100,60 and 38 respectively which was roughly 70,50 and 38 in 1st
week
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. In
week
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 3 number of
downloads
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 for 110 which
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then
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 slightly declined to 100 in
week
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 4 and again climbed to the highest number of
downloads
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 with 125 in
week
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 5. The net
package
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 was the least preferred choice for people in
week
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 3 with only 30
downloads
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 which was boosted up to 40 in
week
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 4 and 50 in the
last
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week
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. Java was the only
package
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 with a constant increase in the number of
downloads
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 till
week
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 5.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words week, package, downloads with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • illustrates
  • trends
  • downloads
  • gradual decline
  • surge
  • popularity
  • frequently downloaded
  • maintained position
  • initially
  • significant gains
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