Around the world, rural people are moving to cities and urban areas, so populations in the countryside are decreasing. Is this a positive or negative development?

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The number of

people

who live in rural areas

are

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declining nowadays as individuals

are prefer

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prefer

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to go

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the metropolitan areas rather than

living

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live

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in the

countryside

. Urbanization is a part of a good change for some developing countries yet it comes with some of the consequences. I

belive

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believe

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, it leads to

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a negeative

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negeative

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negative

impact as more and more housing will required to

accomondate

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accommodate

people

in urban areas which can increase the cost of living for the residents.

Firstly

majority

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the majority

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cities

have quality

eduactional

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educational

institutes and hospitals which is the main reason why most of the humankind

wants

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want

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to move

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metro

cities

However

, if

mass

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the mass

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population are moving to

developed

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the developed

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area

than

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then

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it will result in

less

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fewer

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jobs and less housing in the

cities

Moreover

, it will

effect

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affect

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the demand and supply of

the

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essential

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essentials

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among the

people

that

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and

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can

accelarate

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accelerate

price

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the price

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of different things. To

evidance

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evidence

that, recently Canada

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has been

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facing

housing

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a housing

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crisis among the urban

cities

like Toronto and it's

near by

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nearby

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cities

because mostly immigrants and students

were chose

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to live there as it

have

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wide

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a wide

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variety of colleges

but

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also

businesses of different industries

were

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there

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have a good

emloyement

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employment

yet

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the gorvenment

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gorvenment

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government

is failed to

buid

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build

new houses for the new residents. It caused many

being

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homeless and

started

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living on the streets. Individual's dreams are ruined by their idea of living in

city

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a city

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of dreams as some went into debt because of high costs

among

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big

cities

In addition

, to resolve the

hosuing

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housing

issues there is an undeniable fact that many

gorvenments

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governments

across the world are started building

aparments

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apartments

and superstores in the

countryside

This

solution can improve the

facalities

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facilities

fatalities

among the small towns though it will destroy the environment

as well as

wild life

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wildlife

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across the

countryside

. Will constructing these properties in

countryside

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the countryside

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really help

the

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apply

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humankind? Neither it

solves

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the actual

propblem

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problem

as it seems to make the

countryside

more developed which can again increase the popularity of that area

amdist

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among

people

nor it is protecting the natural beauty and greenery in the

countryside

by building the properties.

To sum up

, having

resourses

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resources

for rural

people

should be prioritized with respecting

growing

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the growing

a growing

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number of

people

moving

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into

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urban

cities

without affecting the cost of

leaving

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living

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and having

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the availbility

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availbility

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availability

of accommodation

then

only it can be a positive development.

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Complete response

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Topic Vocabulary:

Urbanization
Amenities
Economic prospects
Overcrowding
Traffic congestion
Pollution
Agricultural abandonment
Cultural diversity
Innovation
Cultural heritage
Family ties
Infrastructure
Public services
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Around the world, rural people are moving to cities and urban areas, so populations in the countryside are decreasing. Is this a positive or negative development?

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