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Online education training becoming increasingly popular in business world. Discuss advantages and disadvantages in the modern world.

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A significant Learning boom can be observed on the internet in the
last
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 few decades. Many businesses want to
adapt
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online
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an online
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mode
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 of training their
business
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 model to educate their
employees
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. There are plenty of
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 for any
business
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 to use and integrate online
education
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However
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, the following essay will shed light on both benefits and drawbacks. First and foremost, the online
mode
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 of
education
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 is
more
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cheaper and faster compared to
traditional
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the traditional
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 of
education
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. A company expert from around the world can share their wisdom
to
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 various teams without crossing any geofencing boundaries. Google is currently running
cloud-based
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 virtual training program from the United States of America for its
employees
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 around the world.
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 to that, for an employee, online tuition provides more flexibility to be on the job and
learning
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 new things at the same time.
Employee
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 can learn new skill sets
while
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commute
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 to work or having spare time at home without giving away
his
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their
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 working hours. Dominos Australia has an online training program for its
employees
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 which is accessible around the clock so they can learn new skill
set
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 without working on
job
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the job
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. On the flip view, online training
program
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programs
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 should be robust in terms of cyber security. As whenever
business
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share
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 their valuable information over the internet, it is a great threat from
the
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hackers to steal
business
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 trade and sell to other competitors.
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, businesses cannot afford any downtime regarding internet connectivity as both parties would be losing their precious time. In a nutshell, an online
mode
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 of
education
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 for
employees
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 is a great tool to improve the productivity of existing
employees
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 without making any hassle as long as
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business
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businesses
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 have a reliable system for delivery and security measures for
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vulnerable
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business
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 information.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Accessibility
  • Flexibility
  • Logistical challenges
  • Personalized learning pace
  • Cost Effectiveness
  • Interactive tools
  • Industry standards
  • Social Interaction
  • Group dynamics
  • Self-Discipline
  • Technological Issues
  • Digital divide
  • Quality Control
  • Accreditation
  • Up-to-date Information
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