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Some people say now that we can see films on our phones or tablet there is no need to go to the cinemas, others say to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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Watching
movies
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 via our mobile devices become more and more popular nowadays. As
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 , some say visiting the
cinema
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 is no longer necessary
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 some have the opposite point of view. In
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 express my opinion. With more advances in technology , most of the
movies
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 are now available on our phones or tablets. It is true that we can watch it with mobile devices anywhere and anytime and
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, it is much cheaper and easier than visiting the
cinema
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.
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 of buying a
movie
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 ticket for $20 , we can easily watch it online for less than $5. Even though there are few advantages to watching
movies
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 on a phone. I still think that visiting the
cinema
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 is necessary. Despite the fact that it is easier and cheaper to watch
movies
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 on phones or tablets. Visiting the
movie
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 theatres is more than just watching a
movie
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. First of all , most
movie
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 theatres have better equipment
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 as 3D or even 4D displays .
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 it enhances the whole experience and
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 enhancement is priceless for me.
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 , going to the
cinema
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 is one of my favourite family activities .
Instead
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 of watching
movies
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 on small mobile devices , I am more enjoy watching them
together with
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 friends and family. In conclusion , there is no doubt that watching films with phones has lower costs.
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 , visiting the
cinema
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 is irreplaceable as there is better equipment and
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 enhances the total enjoyment of watching a
movie
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 .
Furthermore
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 , it is
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 a joy to watch
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together with
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 family and friends in a
movie
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 theatre
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 is something using a mobile cannot really replace.

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