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In many societies, unpaid work such as volunteering or internships is becoming increasingly common. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of unpaid work.

#societies #work #internships
In recent times there have become more and more
volunteers
, because of a lot of competitions.
However
,
volunteers
 do not take
money
 for their work. In my opinion, in some cases, it is not good, but
overall
 the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
One
 strong argument in favour of drawbacks is not taking
money
 for their work.
In other words
,
volunteers
 mostly do difficult activities, and it will be good if managers give
volunteers
 some percentage of the profit.
According to
 the statistics of 2022 year 0 percent of humans took
money
 from volunteering.
Consequently
, if it continues there might be fewer
volunteers
 in the
world
. There are several arguments why being a volunteer can be beneficial.
Firstly
,
this
 is absolutely interesting.
This
 means that being a volunteer can lead to some feelings
such
 as satisfaction.
Furthermore
, by working in
this
 sphere some people can see famous humans in that sport.
For instance
,
last
 month Aktau held the
World
 Championship in chess,
moreover
, there were a lot of famous people
such
 as
last
 year's
world
 champions and so on.
Secondly
,
this
 is lying in good hotels, eating tasty foods and
this
 kind of thing. Because the government give
money
 to managers, more accurately
this
money
 has to be spent on step forwards.
Last
 month’s
World
 Championship can be an argument for
this
.
Volunteers
 lived in 5 starts hotels and ate in Sweden restaurants for
one
 week.
Therefore
 by being present
one
 can feel and live a lavish life. There were drawbacks and benefits of being an offer
one
's service. In conclusion, being a volunteer is very interesting,and it can lead to good feelings and of course, memorises.
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