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Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their major subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to their main subjects. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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People
 have different views about whether gaining different
knowledge
along with
 major
subjects
 has significant value or it is an unnecessary action. It is important to explore both sides of the argument to gain a comprehensive understanding, In
this
 essay, I will discuss both sides of the topic and provide my
overall
 opinion. There are a number of reasons why acquiring new
skills
 is an important thing in
one
's life.
One
 possible reason is that it helps us to be a qualified worker. By learning different
skills
 from various
sectors
one
 can be a skilful worker in the respective field.
For example
,
one
 person can gain
knowledge
 of computers, bioinformatics, and statistics and be an expert in these
sectors
.
In addition
, learning
subjects
 other than the major ones is the best way to develop our communication
skills
.
This
 can be seen in the instances when
people
 develop their
skills
 in a variety of
sectors
, they can connect themselves with a number of
people
 and learn from them.
On the other hand
, some
people
 claim that the most significant thing is to focus on major
subjects
.
This
 means
people
 may have not only a vast
knowledge
 of their major
subjects
 but
also
 have a clear idea of them. To instantiate,
people
 with broad
skills
 in major
subjects
 find better jobs than others who have not and contribute to the different research
sectors
.
Moreover
, focusing more on compulsory
subjects
 leads
people
 to attend classes regularly which in turn improves the social bonding with their teachers, mates and
also
 with staff associated with the faculty.
This
 refers to the fact that they never feel lonely and
as a result
, they can concentrate on their studies more attentively. In conclusion, taking everything mentioned above into account I would argue that students should gain
knowledge
 of other
subjects
while
 studying at university in order to be sure of success.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Well-rounded education
  • Interdisciplinary knowledge
  • Adaptable and versatile
  • Comprehensive education
  • Creativity and innovation
  • Broad skill set
  • Personal development
  • Deep expertise
  • Advanced research
  • Academic performance
  • Foundational knowledge
  • Time management
  • Stress or burnout
  • Resources and quality
  • Diverse abilities
  • Job market
  • Hobbies
  • Satisfaction
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