The pie charts illustrate the total production of electricity measured in units and divided by different sources of fuel in Australia and France in the year 1980 and 2000.

The pie charts illustrate the total production of electricity measured in units and divided by different sources of fuel in Australia and France in the year 1980 and 2000.
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The provided diagram illustrates the proportion of electricity measured in
units
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across various sources of fuel over 20-year periods in Australia and France. From an
overall
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perspective, it is clear from the pie chart that the usage of Nuclear Power dramatically increased from 15
units
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in 1980 to 126
units
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in the 20th, century.
Whereas
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the coal remained the same over 20 years
while
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the rest dropped except oil. Observing the details, it is remarkable that at the beginning of 1980 coal and natural gas
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the most utilised sources with identical percentages followed by oil with 20
units
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left hydropower at the bottom line with 5
units
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.
On the contrary
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, in the 20th, century nuclear power became the most accessed source at approximately 126
units
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. Comparably, coal maintained the same amount the oil which gradually rose to 25 in 2000
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in, contrast the rest two significantly reduced to 2
units
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throughout the reporting period.
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