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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driveless. The only people travelling inside these vehicle will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driveless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, transformation technology is very massive in our lives. Some
people
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 say that all forms of
the
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transportation will be
driverless
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 in the upcoming life
which
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and
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people
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 become passengers inside these vehicles
whenever
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 they go. At
this
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 point, I can argue that there are a lot of advantages despite the drawbacks. The reason why
driverless
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car
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 have an advantage is because easy to
use
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 and comfortable for older
people
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.
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,
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driverless
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the driverless
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car
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 is very suitable for
vast
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 majority of
people
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 who want to travel
with
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a
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far
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long
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 distance and they do not want to ride alone because of tired.
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, my manager in the company
told
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 that he
prefer
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 to
use
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 a
driverless
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car
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 whenever they have a trip with his family so he can have a break
while
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 on the road.
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,
driverless
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 transportation makes
people
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's
life
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 easier because
in
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 every occasion they do not need to ask a manual tour guide to take them to their destination. Even though
driverless
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car
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 is very convenient,
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, the
price
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 is very expensive. We can see that in Indonesia there is still plenty of
people
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 who
use
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 it, sometimes it comes from the aristocracy who can afford it. The
price
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 is still not friendly with most
people
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 who have a standard salary.
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, my father
prefer
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 to
use
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 a
Japan
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car
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 rather than
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a Tesla
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, an American
car
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, because of the
price
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. If in the future
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 cars
will be
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 tightened, we can encourage the government to have
a terms
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 of how
people
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 with standard
salary
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 can buy those things.
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driverless
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the driverless
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car
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 is very innovative
to make
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in making
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people
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's life accessible and impactful.
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, the
price
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 is very
overpriced
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 and only suitable for
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apply
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people
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 who have
a
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high power. In the future, we can collaborate with the governments on how to standardize the
price
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 for standard
people
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 so
driverless
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 cars will
be
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use
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 for everyone.
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