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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driveless. The only people travelling inside these vehicle will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driveless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, transformation technology is very massive in our lives. Some
people
 say that all forms of
the
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transportation will be
driverless
 in the upcoming life
which
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and
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people
 become passengers inside these vehicles
whenever
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wherever
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 they go. At
this
 point, I can argue that there are a lot of advantages despite the drawbacks. The reason why
driverless
car
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cars
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 have an advantage is because easy to
use
 and comfortable for older
people
.
Furthermore
,
driverless
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the driverless
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car
 is very suitable for
vast
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the vast
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 majority of
people
 who want to travel
with
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a
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far
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long
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 distance and they do not want to ride alone because of tired.
For example
, my manager in the company
told
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 that he
prefer
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prefers
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 to
use
 a
driverless
car
 whenever they have a trip with his family so he can have a break
while
 on the road.
Additionally
,
driverless
 transportation makes
people
's
life
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lives
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 easier because
in
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on
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 every occasion they do not need to ask a manual tour guide to take them to their destination. Even though
driverless
car
 is very convenient,
however
, the
price
 is very expensive. We can see that in Indonesia there is still plenty of
people
 who
use
 it, sometimes it comes from the aristocracy who can afford it. The
price
 is still not friendly with most
people
 who have a standard salary.
For instance
, my father
prefer
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 to
use
 a
Japan
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car
 rather than
Tesla
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a Tesla
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, an American
car
, because of the
price
. If in the future
driverless
 cars
will be
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are
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 tightened, we can encourage the government to have
a terms
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 of how
people
 with standard
salary
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salaries
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 can buy those things.
To conclude
,
driverless
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the driverless
a driverless
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car
 is very innovative
to make
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in making
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people
's life accessible and impactful.
However
, the
price
 is very
overpriced
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high
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 and only suitable for
the
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people
 who have
a
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high power. In the future, we can collaborate with the governments on how to standardize the
price
 for standard
people
 so
driverless
 cars will
be
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use
 for everyone.
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