Counties with long working days are more successful economically, but there are some negative social consequences. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
There are citizens' efforts behind every successful
economy
. It is believed by a few individuals that long working hours
contribute towards the success of a nation's economy
, but as a ,result it causes destructive social development. I completely agree with this
notion to a significant extent, in the following essay I will shed light on my viewpoint.
Firstly
, There are major advantages to extended working days. To begin
with, all individual people's daily work
and effort run the country's economy
and those who work
longer, mean adding extra effort on top of it. Furthermore
, additional time spent on office work
added together and runs an economy
speedily, which ultimately puts their nation first globally. For example
, the World's top 3 economies like US, China and Japan, are only because their local citizen daily used to spend an additional one or two hours
on top of their regular eight hours
. Hence
, hard work
pays off for a successful economy
.
Secondly
, There are some drawbacks of longer office hours
as well. To start with, spending additional hours
in the work
area deducts family time too. To explain it further
, most humans have families and are socially connected with each other. If every individual start spending more hours
in the office, they not only start getting disconnected from the community but also
create adverse effects on their individual relationship. Moreover
, this
will generate gap and crack in individuals' family. For example
, Even though China currently is in the top three economy
-wise, they are on the lower side happy citizen index due to
irregular job days.
In conclusion, Even though it is proven that more working days more the country on top economically, but may evolve negative waves socially.Submitted by maheshluhar on
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