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The graph shows the information about international conferences in 3 capital cities in 1980-2010. Summarize the information and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the information about international conferences in 3 capital cities in 1980-2010. Summarize the information and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the recycling
rate
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 for various types of selected materials in a certain country over a 28-year
period
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.
Overall
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, it is obvious that
while
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 paper
and
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apply
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cardboard and
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also
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apply
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glass containers were by far the most recycled materials over the
period
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 in question,
aluminum
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 cans and plastics were the least recycled.
Moreover
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, the recycling
rate
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 of
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aluminum
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aluminium
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 cans increased dramatically in the interval shown. In 1982, paper and cardboard which had the highest recycling
rate
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 in the mentioned years, started recycling at about 65%.
This
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 figure had some fluctuation before reaching a peak of 80% in 1994 and
then
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 decreased steadily by 2010.
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, glass containers which had the second most of recycling proportion, began to be recycled at 50% in 1982 and after a little drop
in1990
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, rose gradually for the rest of the
period
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.
On the other hand
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,
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aluminum
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aluminium
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 cans and plastics were not recycled until 1986 and 1990, respectively and the
rate
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 of both of them
were
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was
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 under 5%.
While
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Aluminum
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 cans’ recycling
rate
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 climbed rapidly to around 45% by 2010, the recycling
rate
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 of plastics rose negligibly by the end of the
period
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rate, period, aluminum with synonyms.
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