Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of differnet cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

The total number of
minutes
of phone calls in the UK has been illustrated in three different parts between 1995 and 2002. In sum, the highest of calls happened in 1999 which were based on local fixed lines
while
the lowest of telephone calls
were
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in the first year (1995) using mobiles. In detail,
according to
the statistics, in 1995, the most
communaction
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communication
of people
were
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through local fixed lines for about 73
billion
minutes
; it increased meaningfully until 1999 and reached 90
billion
mintues
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minutes
.
However
, it decreased from
then
to 2002 to reach 73
billion
minutes
which was as same as
1995
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.
On the other hand
, when the whole amount of usage of
national
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and international fixed
line
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lines
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was about 38
billion
minutes
in 1995, we can see it increased
slughtly
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slightly
until 2002 to reach more than 60
billion
minutes
. Samely, the total number of
minutes
using
mobilephones
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phones
increased sharply
between
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the period; at
first
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it was about 3
billion
minutes
and
then
almost 45
billion
minutes
.
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