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The line graph compares the number of cars stolen for every 1000 vehicles in four countries from 1990 to 1999.

The line graph compares the number of cars stolen for every 1000 vehicles in four countries from 1990 to 1999.
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The chart illustrates differences of the proportion of car thefts per 1000 transport in four different states, namely: Great
Britain
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,
Sweden
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,
France
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 and
Canada
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 over a nine-year period.
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, there are two general trends: upward and downward. Whilst the number of theft in
Sweden
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 climbed, the figures for Great
Britain
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,
France
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 and
Canada
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 declined. Between 1990 and 1992, there was a partial growth in the trends of Great
Britain
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 and
Sweden
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 by around 3000;
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, by following two years, trends of
France
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 and
Canada
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 reduced moderately. The quantity of cars stolen in
Sweden
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 reached approximately 14000 by around 7000,over a six year period from 1993. Before declining to back again, the figures of
France
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 and
Canada
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 grew minimally from 1993 to 1998. The trend of Great
Britain
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 registered generally a mild fluctuation during nine years. At the middle of the trend increased sharply at around 19000 and again declined to under 17000.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words britain, sweden, france, canada with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • line graph
  • vehicle theft
  • car theft rates
  • fluctuation
  • trend analysis
  • decade
  • statistic
  • anomaly
  • vehicle security
  • law enforcement
  • economic factors
  • peak
  • decline
  • security measures
  • anti-theft technology
  • perpetrator
  • crime rate
  • surveillance
  • deterrent
  • law and order
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