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Many agriculture lands are being converted Into commercial centres. How does this affect the environment and people's life style. Discuss the situation and provide suggestion.

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Due to
 industrialization, many farmlands are converted into business buildings, which can have a deteriorating effect on nature
as well as
 on human beings.
This
 essay will discuss the problems that can arise
due to
this
 and suggest some solutions to tackle
this
 problem. To embark on, urbanization and the Industrial Revolution have several drawbacks to society. To be more precise, in order to build commercial streets, much agricultural land has been converted into dry land,
thus
 reducing crop cultivation that may lead to famine in the future
which will not be longer happens
Verb problem
.
show examples
,
For instance
, the conversion of paddy fields can lead to a reduced rice production, which is the staple food in many countries causes scarcity of rice in the market.
In addition
, to implementing industrialisation many are involved in deforestation, which can lead to global warming and climatic changes.
For example
, in the UK when compared with the previous year's climate,
this
 year has many changes
such
 as increased humidity and temperature, it is the effects of global warming.
However
, controlling those issues is essential in maintaining the world's peace. The government should implement laws to control agricultural field conversion.
Besides
, the deforestation has to be controlled. The authorities have to take the initiative to bring awareness among the public in relation to the importance of preserving trees and farmlands. The involvement of the community can tackle
this
 issue to an extent. To illustrate, involving students in planting trees will make a big change in society. To recapitulate, the Industrial Revolution brought positive changes to people globally,
Nevertheless
, the drawbacks are more than the benefits as it causes global warming to be worse, so awareness and laws need to be implemented by governing bodies.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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