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The advantages of the spread of English as a global language will continue to outweigh its disadvantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree? You should write at least 250 words.

#spread #english #language
It is clearly seen that
English
 has
been
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spread rapidly as a main global
language
 to all over the globe with its detrimental effect on the
existance
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existence
 of the local languages. I do
accord
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this
issues
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 since it might
be
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eradicate the identity of a nation
as well as
their
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its
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 pride. On the one hand, regarding
to
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globalisation people are
encaurage
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encouraged
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 to have
ability
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 to have ability speak in
English
 especially in
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country
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countries
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. As
the
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 matter of fact,
peoples
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people
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 from
non-
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non-English
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english
language
country
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countries
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 persuade their
student
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students
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 to learn
english
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English
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 and even provide it in
school
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the school
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 curriculum as mandatory.
For instance
, in my
country
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,country
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 even
kindergarden
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kindergarten
 students learn
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the english
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english
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language
.
Thus
, some of them could not talk in their national
language
 whilst it might be make their mother
language
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.
On the other hand
, perhaps
for
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those who speak
english
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 fluently and works in
the
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giant company in some
develop
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developed
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 countries have a tendency to feel
akward
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awkward
 using their own mother
tounge
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tongue
. Surprisingly, they
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 not
want
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 to
acknlowledge
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acknowledge
 their roots and pretend to be a real citizen of
English spoken
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English-speaking countries
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country
.
This
his
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is how centering a
languange
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language
to
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into
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a
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the
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 main
language
to
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of
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 all
nation
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nations
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 could create
those kind
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 of
attittude
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attitudes
.
To conclude
, even
it
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if
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 having
global
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a global
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language
 is essential in
this
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of
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era it
also
have
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has
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negative
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 side which slowly people might forget to use their
origin
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language
.
Therefore
, we still need to encourage each
country
 to heritage local
language
 especially
to
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youngsters in order
toboost
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to boost
 their sense of nationality.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global language
  • lingua franca
  • communication
  • employment opportunities
  • economic growth
  • cultural exchange
  • knowledge sharing
  • education
  • travel
  • linguistic diversity
  • cultural imperialism
  • linguistic imperialism
  • colonization
  • identity
  • language preservation
  • cultural heritage
  • mutual understanding
  • intercultural relationships
  • linguistic barriers
  • disadvantaged communities
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