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The two tables below show the exchange students from universities in Europe to Australia between 2007 and 2009. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two tables below show the exchange students from universities in Europe to Australia between 2007 and 2009. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given tables provide information about
universites
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universities
university
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students
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students'
student's
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exhange
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exchange
program
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programs
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 between Europe and
Australia
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 From 2007 to 2009.
Overal
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Overall
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,
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the exhange
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exhange
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exchange
student
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program
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programs
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experinced
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experienced
experience
 fluctuated between all those five countries except
Netherland
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Netherlands
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remain
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remained
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 stable and Germany rose slightly both from
or
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apply
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to
Australia
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.
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However
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,However
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 France leads the numbers from those two figures.
According to
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 the data, all
european
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European
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student
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students
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 who took
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an intership
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intership
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internship
 program
to
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in
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Australia
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 were various. France, Sweden and Germany increased from 2007 to 2009. In 2007
it is
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,
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 about 60
students
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 were from
French
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France
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;
however
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, in 2009 it counted only 60
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student
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students
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 followed by
United
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the United
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 Kingdom the number decreased from 31 to 26 people.
On the other hand
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, Germany showed
significant
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a significant
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increased
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increase
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 from 27 to 62 and Sweden
depict
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showed
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 a gradual
rose
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rise
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 from 34 to 42
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student
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students
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.
More over
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Moreover
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,
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the Netherland
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Netherlands
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Netherland
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Netherlands
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was remain
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remained
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 stable
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with
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by
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with
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 36
students
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respectively
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apply
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during the
periode
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period
.
On the other hand
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, About 37
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student
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students
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of
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from
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 Universities in
Australia
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 went to France and the number
goes
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went
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 up to 58 in 2009.
Likewise
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, there was a slight
different
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difference
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from
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between
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 2007 and 2009 for German (German 18 to 26).
In contrast
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, the other 3 countries (Sweden, UK and The
Netherland
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Netherlands
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)
just
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had just
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 about 18 - 30
students
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 and it plummeted
at the end
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 of year.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, on the other hand".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, australia, student with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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