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n some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative situation?

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Nowadays, it is very important to own a
home
 for many reasons, one of these is the price because if you must
rent
 a
home
, it costs too much.
However
, for some people having a
home
 is their own reason for life and
this
 could create problems. In
this
 essay, I will explain the advantages and disadvantages of
this
 situation and I will give my points of view.
On the other hand
, if you have a house
it’s
 more comfortable because you don’t pay every month the
rent
 and you can have your space.
For instance
, the majority of people think that living in a big house with many rooms, beautiful landscapes and a garden helps you to live better, especially when you’re tired. In my opinion, I believe that
it’s
 better to be happy than to have a big house but today, but nowadays
it’s
 very difficult to own a
home
 because there are a lot of taxes. Unfortunately,
it’s
 a negative situation.
Furthermore
, almost all citizens haven’t a
home
 because costs so much to buy one and they
rent
 where homes are cheap, to save money.
For instance
, I’m a student who lives in Turin and I
rent
 a
home
 to live in and
this
 creates some problems, my parents every month spend a lot of money to make me live well. In conclusion, I believe that all prefer to have a
home
 because you can save money and one day I hope the governments help citizens buy a to make them happy.
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