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n some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative situation?

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Nowadays, it is very important to own a
home
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 for many reasons, one of these is the price because if you must
rent
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 a
home
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, it costs too much.
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, for some people having a
home
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 is their own reason for life and
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 could create problems. In
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 essay, I will explain the advantages and disadvantages of
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 situation and I will give my points of view.
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, if you have a house
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 more comfortable because you don’t pay every month the
rent
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 and you can have your space.
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, the majority of people think that living in a big house with many rooms, beautiful landscapes and a garden helps you to live better, especially when you’re tired. In my opinion, I believe that
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 better to be happy than to have a big house but today, but nowadays
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 very difficult to own a
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 because there are a lot of taxes. Unfortunately,
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 a negative situation.
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, almost all citizens haven’t a
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 because costs so much to buy one and they
rent
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 where homes are cheap, to save money.
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, I’m a student who lives in Turin and I
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 a
home
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 to live in and
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 creates some problems, my parents every month spend a lot of money to make me live well. In conclusion, I believe that all prefer to have a
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 because you can save money and one day I hope the governments help citizens buy a to make them happy.
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