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Some scientists think that there are intelligent life forms on other planets and messages should be sent to contact them. Other scientists think that it is a bad idea and would be dangerous. Discuss both views and give your own opinions.

The United States Government has recently confirmed the existence of “non-humans” from outer
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 and their research on these creatures.
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 news is shocking to all
Earth
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 citizens. There are 2 streams of opinion coming from the public:
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 states that
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 is a revolution in the journey of exploring the universe; the other
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 believes that the risks are too great to be foreshadowed and that humanity is not capable of undertaking them. In my point of view, knowing that there are other civilizations other than the
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 on
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 planet is a positive sign for the future.
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 with, along the journey of trying to contact outer
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species
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,
scientists
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 would encounter other successes in advancing technologies that have realistic impacts on people’s daily lives.
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 of the methods of approaching aliens is to send signals to
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 on a large scale.
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 can be applied vice versa as sending signals from
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 back to
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 from satellites which could be improved for areas
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 as weather forecasting, Internet connection, and distanced communication.
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, by acknowledging the existence of intelligent life forms on other planets,
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 learn that there are living environments on these planets and by communicating with these
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,
scientists
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 can
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 study the biological and chemical compounds that exist there. With the rapid growth of the population on
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, that information is priceless as people should discover an alternative ideal accommodation planet to resolve
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 problem.
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, the main reason for the negativity toward the action of reaching for non-human
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 is because of the little knowledge of humanity on
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 topic so the risks are undeniable. When contact between humans and other
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 from
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 is made, it means that these
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 have the same level of development in technology as humans or are even tremendously more advanced.
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, people do not know the intention of those aliens whether it is a friendly and collaborative or bad and destructive attitude. Considering these two factors, it is evident that if communication goes unpredictably wrong, humanity will be left powerless facing, perhaps, superior intelligent creatures.
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, the advancement of
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 technologies is in its risen era in which
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 seek contact with outer
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species
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.
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 could enhance a promising future for
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 citizens as it improves the telecommunication fields and
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 the reality of living on another planet in the universe.
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, the unknown area of
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 subject is filled with risks that can be too great to be handled. In my opinion, craving for knowledge is a starter step in order to develop and evolve.
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 reaching out to intelligent aliens is the first brick in the foundation of discovering the unknown
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • extraterrestrial
  • investigate
  • interstellar
  • speculate
  • communication
  • primitive
  • potential
  • collaboration
  • unlock
  • unprecedented
  • advancement
  • caution
  • consequences
  • hostile
  • unknowingly
  • civilization
  • disrupt
  • evolution
  • preserve
  • ponder
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