some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particulat species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important envirnmental problems. discuss both views and give your opinion.
Nowadays, it is a fact that are obliged to deal with many environmental obstacles. Many of them tend to believe that the most crucial of all problems, is the elimination of some animal and plant species,
while
some others accused that there are more essential problems corresponding to the environment. In this
essay, I will demonstrate both aspects and place my thoughts about them.
Due to
some research, it can be clearly seen, that the extinction of some kind of flora and fauna is resulting in great negative issues. For instance
, a disruption in the food chain might lead to excessive growth in particular
species, leading to the proliferation of some infections. If, for example
, there is an elimination of cats, that might result in an outgrowth of different reptiles, like rats and snakes. Thus
, there will be a strike in typhus disease and many poisonous biting incidences for snakes, that might set humanity in danger. In addition
, it has been proved, that trees tend to consume our CO2 and exchange it with O2. In other words
, if there is a loss of trees due to
excessive construction, that might lead to asphyxia , and even people need a supporting device to maintain their O2 levels.
Despite this
, others, myself included, claim that there are more harmful environmental issues. Indeed, our planet suffers from massive climate changes, affected by the greenhouse effect. Scientists prove that there is an obvious trend in temperatures, resulting in the melting of ice, in which consequently
there is an increase in the sea level. If that happened, then
some regions might get vanished from the global map. In my point of view, global warming together with
climate change are in fact the most crucial environmental aspects that people have to deal with
In conclusion, elimination
of animal species or plantsCorrect article usage
the elimination
,
has a great impact on the planet, but the greenhouse effect is way more important with much more negative results Remove the comma
apply
in
humanity, so Change preposition
for
that is
worth giving attention to and trying to minimise it.Submitted by nikoletta.louka on
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Provide more specific examples and evidence to support your points about the environmental issues discussed.