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Some people think that the increase in international travel has a negative impact on the environment and should be restricted. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Traveling
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 around the world
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 become a trend in recent years. Some experts reckon that the increasing frequency of worldwide journeys might cause a negative shock to the environment,
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, they think it should be limited. Personally, I agree with
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 opinion, and the following content will list
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my reasons. The emission of
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pollution
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left
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 the local areas
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 surged
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these days.
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 did bring some short-term benefits to the local residents,
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, the influence and the damage to the environment are long-term,
in other words
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, it might be forever.
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, there was a small village called Tainan,
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 was known for
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 quality
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agriculture and breathtaking natural scenery, they had recently expanded the business for
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visitors. The village earned more money than ever, but the natural scenery
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 replaced by plenty of artificial items and
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agriculture
were
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 affected by rubbish and
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pollution.
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, the invasion
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 cultural background should
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 be noticed. Traveling around the world,
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not only
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 pollution but
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let
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 local culture
fading
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 out the history.
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, some aboriginal tribes in Taiwan
change
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 their way of living in order to develop tourist
business
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businesses
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,
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as
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, hunters didn’t hunt for
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food in the forest anymore,
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, they chose to open
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grocery or
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store
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 in the mountain to provide food for visitors. In conclusion, even though there is a few temporary benefit can bring inhabitants a better life.
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, the detrimental changes to the natural environment and the culture might be forever.
As a result
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, I strongly recommend the government should do something to settle down
this
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 issue.

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Grammar
Recheck your verb conjugations and make sure they agree with the subject. E.g. 'have become' should be 'has become', 'were left' should be 'is left'.
Structure
Make sure to keep your sentences concise and to the point. Avoid run-on sentences, they can be confusing and make your point less clear.
Vocabulary
Work on the use of articles. For example, 'the invasion to cultural background' should be 'the invasion of cultural backgrounds' or 'damage to the cultural background'.
Grammar
Use the correct prepositions. E.g. 'bring inhabitants a better life' should be 'bring inhabitants better lives' or 'improve the lives of inhabitants'.
Content
Make sure to provide clear and specific examples to support your points. This will strengthen your argument and make it more compelling.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon footprint
  • biodiversity
  • ecosystem
  • sustainable travel
  • eco-friendly
  • carbon emissions
  • habitat destruction
  • cultural dilution
  • overcrowding
  • resource depletion
  • sustainable
  • environmental impact
  • tourism ethics
  • green initiatives
  • conservation efforts
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