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Some people claim that not enough of the waste from homes is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a legal requirement. To what extent do you think laws are needed to make people recycle more of their waste?

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environmental pollution, elites debate that the only practical measure to come up with
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 issue is
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 government to enforce recycling by
laws
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. I reckon
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 approach is effective, yet has pros and cons. The first and foremost is the advantages, legal
supports
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support

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 for recycling stimulates collaborations in the society. All walks of
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life, who are putting the
laws
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practice, can turn to each other to become
partner
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partners

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 and share the job.
For instance
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, A mechanic may turn to a truck driver to relocate his waste to recycling sites and in return, he repairs the other one's vehicle.
As a result
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, both will enjoy saving money.
On the other hand
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, there are some drawbacks, it is highly likely to provoke financial corruption among the public and the authorities. There are always bad actors in the community who find the
laws
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do
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not fulfil their ambitions,
therefore
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, they are willing to break the
laws
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. They are highly likely to turn to the authorities, and in exchange
of
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 money ask them to bypass the regulation.
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, an individual who is already suffering from taxes,
instead
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 of investing hugely in his home facilities, spends money to persuade local authorities to ignore his
wasting
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. In conclusion, legal enforcement for
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recycling is beneficial for the country which brings about
partnership
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partnerships

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However
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,
this
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 approach requires a
deliberately
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deliberate

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 practice since it may lead to
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financial
corruptions
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corruption

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Waste management
  • Recycling
  • Sustainability
  • Mandatory
  • Voluntary
  • Legislative measures
  • Environmental impact
  • Public awareness
  • Regulation
  • Sanctions
  • Compliance
  • Recycling facilities
  • Consumer behavior
  • Waste reduction
  • Resource conservation
  • Circular economy
  • Eco-friendly
  • Biodegradable
  • Landfill
  • Global initiative
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