The diagram below shows information about student attendance in various schools. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows information about student attendance in various schools. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the number of
students
attending
in
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Royal
Latin
,
Didcot
Secondary, Seven Oaks, and Page Hill in the period of 2001 to 2007. Seven Oaks and Page Hill had the highest and lowest student
attendance
, respectively.
In addition
,
Didcot
Secondary and Royal
Latin
had steady positions, either second or third position.
First,
Seven Oaks scored the highest student
attendance
in 2006, with almost one thousand
students
in that year. It
also
topped the number of student
attendance
in the entire year between 2001 to 2007.
In contrast
, Page Hill always got fewer
students
than others and in 2001 the school scored the lowest
attendance
with not exceeding 400
students
.
Lastly
, from 2001 to 2005 Royal
Latin
always got more
students
than
Didcot
Secondary. Yet, in 2006
Didcot
Secondary surpassed the number of
students
attending Royal
Latin
with more than 600
students
for both schools.
Furthermore
, the gap increased in the next year.
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