Some people believe that once a person becomes a criminal, he will always be a criminal. Do you agree with this statement? Provide specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is thought by some that when one commits a crime, he would stay criminal throughout his entire
life
. I, however
, completely disagree with this
statement because sometimes people commit crime
Fix the agreement mistake
crimes
in
the influence of a bad company Change preposition
under
and
to save their Correct word choice
apply
life
.
The primary reason can be that individuals may choose wrong
people to be their friends, particularly at a young age. When they get Correct article usage
the wrong
along with
them, they get involve
in Change the form of the verb
involved
wrong doings
too Correct your spelling
wrongdoings
such
as intake of drugs, and then
just to manage their addiction related
expenses, they perform wrong acts, which Add a hyphen
addiction-related
in
Change preposition
as
Correct article usage
a results
results
, make them Fix the agreement mistake
result
culprit
. A particularly good example here is Australia, where more teenagers are found guilty of robbery cases Fix the agreement mistake
culprits
due to
their drug addiction. This
example vividly explains that
how the influence of bad company Correct word choice
apply
make
them criminal, even though, they do not have any criminal history before.
Self-protection could be Change the verb form
makes
the
another causeRemove the article
apply
,
when people commit Remove the comma
apply
crime
. If they encounter any situation, where another person tries to harm them, they act violently with the intention of saving their Fix the agreement mistake
crimes
life
. This
sometimes make
them offender, if the attacker loses a Change the verb form
makes
life
. For instance
, recently an incident happened in India, where a woman was trying to protect herself from sexual assault,
when she used a weapon to save her from being victimized. Remove the comma
apply
This
incident labelled her as a criminal in the eyes of law
, when the attacker got Correct article usage
the law
harm
and lost his Wrong verb form
harmed
life
. But in reality
it was a self-defence act.
In conclusion, Add a comma
,reality
its
seems to me that Correct pronoun usage
it
bad
influence of others during Correct article usage
the bad
teenage
period and circumstances where one act violently for self-protection are situations that Add an article
the teenage
a teenage
makes
a person criminal sometimes, but they are actually Change the verb form
make
decent
person in reality.Add an article
a decent
the decent
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