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The table and chart show data from a survey of library users.

The table and chart show data from a survey of library users.
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The provided diagram illustrates the proportion of people who
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library
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frequency
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 across three diverse
age
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 groups in 2012. In
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Overall
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, it is clear from the table that the youngest group has
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 percentage in both categories except
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 idea that
librery
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library
liberty
 is crucial. Comparably, the rest two sections have their peak fractions in the third
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whereas
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 the usage of
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library
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 and
get
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help from
librarian
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 remained at the bottom. Observing the details, it is noticeable that
16
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-17
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 group reached its peak by approximately 72% in the first
domain
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 followed by the third
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 at 54%
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 43% in
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domain
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, contrast 18-24
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 group usage of
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library
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the library
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 is roughly 58% and only 27% got help
by
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 the librarian but they thought that
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library
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the library
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 is essential around 63%.
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,
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-30
age
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 section started in
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 category at 54% which was the lowest rate of
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 groups followed by 19% in
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 category and
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its
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 peak
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 74% in the third section.
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, with what has been analysed and compared it is crucial to highlight that the youngest
age
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 is more present in
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library
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the library
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words library, age, domain with synonyms.
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