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In the past important knowledge of culture and history was started in museums nowady information is freely available on internet therefore is no longer need for museum. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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In the old days,
people
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 gathered
information
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 regarding
culture
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 and traditions from
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museum
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,
while
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 in recent times, certain
people
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 have accessed the internet for free
knowledge
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 of the same.
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,it has been suggested that there is no requirement for the
museum
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. I strongly disagree with
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 statement because
people
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 lack true cultural and traditional
knowledge
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, and
this
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trend
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also
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 creates a huge financial burden for individuals.
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trend
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 is that
people
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 lack true
culture
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 and traditional
knowledge
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.
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 is to say that the various online free resources are not trustworthy because they are not authorised by any government officials compared to the
museum
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's library journal and articles, which were written by foreign authors;
therefore
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,
people
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 decline their
knowledge
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 about
culture
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 and traditions.
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, the young generation in the UK collects
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culture
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 and
tradition
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information
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 from Google's free-access
culture
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 website
due to
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 the absence of the
museum
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;
this
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 is
their
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 principal reason for their little
knowledge
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 regarding
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 matter.
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, the second reason for not agreeing with
this
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trend
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 is that it creates a huge financial burden for individuals.
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 is because when
people
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 acquire free cultural
information
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 through surfing the high-speed internet
instead
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 of
museum
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information
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, which is most expensive for everyone in an average-income household, it creates huge financial pressure for them.
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, every middle-class family in India has financial pressure to access high-speed internet to gather free
knowledge
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 about
culture
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 and tradition. To summarise,
although
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people
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 gathered
information
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 regarding
culture
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 and tradition from
museum
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 content in the past, now they learn that
knowledge
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 from free online materials. I strongly disagree with
this
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trend
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 because
people
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 decrease their true
knowledge
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 and have financial burdens.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • invaluable
  • interactive
  • exhibit
  • artifacts
  • preserve
  • contextualize
  • authentic
  • curate
  • promote
  • educate
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