-Some parents believe that learning mathematics at school is redundant and should not be taught while others believe that it should remain a foundational subject whether or not it is used later in life. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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subject so
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should reject it from the
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and not let teachers teach
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the
children
.
However
, others believe that
this
subject will be useful for every
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in
life
.
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of
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viewpoints and give my own opinion.
Firstly
, these days, parents are so friendly
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their
children
and they do not want to
children
struggle not only in
life
but
also
even at
school
, to obtain
the
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difficult subjects
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a
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math
.
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, not every child has
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the skill
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to learn
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math
in
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at
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the
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depth early age and it will
unimportant
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later
life
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in life
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.
Due to
a
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modern technology or apps, any calculations are not being done by
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anymore.
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consequently
, if
children
wanted to be
dngineer
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engineer
engineers
or
counter
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counters
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in the future, special apps would come to help them to count and
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it
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their time they performance only
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a few
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minutes.
On the other hand
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some people think that
a
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math
plays a crucial role
children's
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life
.
For instance
, at
school
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,school
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this
would be a fundamental science because some researchers show that learning mathematics at
school
it
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apply
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will prevent a mental illness
such
as dementia in later
life
.
Moreover
, if
children
learned
a
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math
sufficiently
then
they would obtain
anather
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another
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science
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faster than their siblings.
A
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math
helps to train the brain like solving problems. To me, the conclusion
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a
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math
should be taught at
school
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around the world because
when
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it improves
children
's memory and critical thinking.
Also
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it will be used
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in
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every
fields
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such
as technology,
counter
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and banks
too
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.
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  • logical reasoning
  • analytical skills
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  • professions
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  • engineering
  • technology
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