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The chart below compare the number of people per household* in the UK in 1981 and 2001. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The chart below compare the number of people per household* in the UK in 1981 and 2001. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The
given
Verb problem
apply
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bar chart provides information on each UK
Families
Change noun form
family's
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 demographic numbers from 1981 and 2001.
Overall
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, a family with two
members
Use synonyms
 was calculated
the
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as the
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 highest of both
period
Change to a plural noun
periods
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while
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 the big family was the least.
According to
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 the data, in 1981 about 31 British
household
Change to a plural noun
households
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counted
Verb problem
apply
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had 2 family
members
Use synonyms
 in each family,
while
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 those who were in
the
Correct article usage
a
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 single family and 3 - 4
members
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was
Unnecessary verb
apply
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shared almost similar number (17-20).
On the other hand
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,
nuclear
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the nuclear
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 family was found not popular around the country, which is just merely under 10.
On the other hand
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, in 2001 the number of the
single family
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single-family
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 rose slightly to 26.
Likewise
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, for those with 2 family
members
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 which
is
Unnecessary verb
apply
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in 1988 counted by 31
then
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decrease
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decreased
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 to 34.
In contrast
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, the figure for extended family
fall
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fell
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 significantly by about 5- 17 and the number
for
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of
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 5 to 6 persons family
members
Use synonyms
also
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 plummeted to under 5 households.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "on the other hand, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words members with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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