Write about the following topic: Exposure to international media, such as films, TV and magazines, has an impact on the local culture. What do you think of these impacts? Do you think that the advantages of these impacts outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Many
people
believe that our local
culture
is highly impacted
due to
foreign exposure
particularly
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,particularly
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in terms of media
such
as movies, TV channels
and
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apply
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,
news papers
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newspapers
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.
Although
, it has certain
disavantages
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disadvantages
such
as it could make
people
lower their cultural values by promoting international customs, I believe that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
This
essay will discuss my opinion in detail with supporting evidence. On the one hand, I would say that exposing to international
culture
makes
people
forget about their own
culture
and language.
In other words
,
people
who watch other movies and channels predominantly
adopt
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adapt
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themselves to the new
culture
and learn the new language.
As a result
, they will stop using their own language which will eventually fade out permanently.
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task achievement
Provide more specific examples and evidence to support your ideas.
coherence cohesion
Ensure a clear and logical organization of ideas throughout the essay.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • shaping perceptions
  • influencing lifestyles
  • cultural homogenization
  • distinct local identities
  • language learning
  • communication skills
  • cultural dilution
  • exchange of ideas
  • global harmony
  • awareness
  • stereotypes
  • misconceptions
  • innovation
  • creativity
  • cultural diversity
  • preserve local culture
  • cultural exchange programs
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