Many people think that to become a successful speciailist it's better to choose a career early in life and never changer it later. To what extent do you agree with tis view. support your opinion with relevant examples.

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Nowadays many people believe that it is better to choose your job as early as possible and remain in the same field forever in order to become successful. In my viewpoint,
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it is good to know your purpose early in life, but
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guarantee your success. I will explain my reasons with relevant examples in the following paragraph. On the one hand, not everybody
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what they want from life when they are young and they can'
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choose their permanent career early in life.
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, my cousin wanted to be a doctor as a child and she went to a medical school after she graduated from
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.
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, after a
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she found that
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world
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not suitable for her and she made
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decision
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to stop studying
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. She was told by everybody that she
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a big mistake and she will be successful after graduation, but she couldn'
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stand university as she thought the courses were so hard. After quitting university she found a job in a kindergarten but she found herself that she can'
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progress that much as a daycare teacher and she went to a university at the age of 30 and started studying
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teaching. Now she is 40 years old and she is so successful in her field.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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