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In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case?Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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In many countries,
people
 usually have high expectations for owning a
house
，it is usually a symbol of stability and happiness in life.
Therefore
, most
people
 regard owning a
house
 as the most important part of life. In my opinion, I strongly agree with
this
 point of view,
this
 essay will explore the reasons for
importance
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the importance
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 of
people
 owning a
house
 and the positive factors for it. Owning a home is a source of stability and security for many
people
. Renting has many uncertainties for
people
.
For example
, the landlord may propose to increase the rent or impose other additional conditions at any time.
In contrast
,
people
 who own a
house
 have more control and freedom, and they can make any modifications to the
house
 without the landlord's permission.
In addition
, owning a
house
 is an irreplaceable sense of belonging for
people
,
people
 live in the same community for a long time,
familiar
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 community life and
neighbors
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 are necessary for the growth and safety of children. As time goes by, real estate prices increase every year, in the future homeowners can make a profit by selling.
For example
, housing prices in Melbourne were usually $800,000
in
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ten years ago, but now the
house
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houses
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 have risen 1-2 times,
Therefore
, investing in a
house
 is an investment that will not depreciate in value. In conclusion, owning a
house
 can not only provide
people
 with a sense of stability and happiness, but investing in a
house
 can
also
 reap wealth benefits, and a familiar community can give
people
 a sufficient sense of security.
Although
 there may be some disadvantages, owning
home
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 is a worthwhile goal for many
people
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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