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two maps below show an island before ans after the construction of some tourist facilities.

two maps below show an island before ans after the construction of some tourist facilities.
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The maps illustrate information about an
island
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 before and after its development.
This
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island
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 is constructed to be a tourist town.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 in the past,
this
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island
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 was unspoilt without facilities at all.
On the other hand
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, there have been some significant changes in its facilities and transportation, but all trees on the
island
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 have been untouched. In the past, the
island
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 was completely
bared
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bare
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 with no facilities only some tropical native trees
grown
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growing
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 on it.
However
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, there was a beach area on the west of the
island
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. After its development, the
island
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have
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 transformed
to
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into
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 a holiday
island
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where
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that
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 consists of some amenities that tourists need. The pier was constructed on the south of the
island
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 and
have been
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has
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 welcomed visitors to the
island
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 by boat. Apart from that, reception was built around 20
metre
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metres
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 north of the pair, and on the north coast,
restaurant
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a restaurant
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 was constructed there. In terms of accommodation, there are two areas of bungalows.
Firstly
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 six bungalows were built on the western side of the
island
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, around the palm tree area and not far from the beach, where visitors can swim
there
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apply
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.
Secondly
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, nine bungalows were constructed and located in the middle of the
island
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 where customers can enjoy the pier and woodland views.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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