In some countries more and more people are hiring a personal trainer ,rather than plying sports or doing exercise classes what are reasons for this ,is this a positive or negative development?
Nowadays number of
countries
people
consider about
their health. Change preposition
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to
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to this
people
hire trainers
, rather than doing
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do
an
exercise and sports. In my point of view, Correct article usage
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this
is a positive development. People
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life
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lives
however
; they should be
build- up good health of Unnecessary verb
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life
Because, of that some countries
hire trainers
. In my opinion, I am going to explain Correct word choice
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further
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countries
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diabetes
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The reasons
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reason
this
their
live Correct pronoun usage
they
in
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life could not
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lives and cannot
to
think about their fitness. If they hire consultants, have Change the verb form
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brilliant
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brilliantly
of
positive impacts rather than doing their exercise and sports. Change preposition
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For instance
, I take in to
account, Correct your spelling
into
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that diabetics
diabetics
patients, always Fix the agreement mistake
diabetic
they
want to guide someone because these patients want to follow the doctor’s advice but if they live Correct pronoun usage
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in
alone do not like to follow anything. Change preposition
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However
, hire
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hiring
trainers
always guide
him Correct subject-verb agreement
guides
as a result
, will improve health conditions positive way. Therefore
, previously
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as previously
I
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mentions
, hiring Wrong verb form
mentioned
trainers
easy to buildup
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build
good
healthy Correct article usage
a good
life
.
On the other hand
, folk live in
busy Change preposition
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life
most of the time very tired and suffer. Fix the agreement mistake
lives
Reasons
are they do not want to do any physical activities. Correct article usage
The reasons
However
, hire
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hiring
trainers
influence
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influences
to
society doing physical activities. Change preposition
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This
situation Change preposition
In this
people
have been doing exercise or sports easily build up their moral
. As Correct your spelling
morale
result
, they will motivate in spite of demotivating. Correct article usage
a result
Finally
, I would like to say, Correct word choice
that people
people
motivation has a positive development.
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people's
To conclude
, In my opinion, some countries
hire trainers
more popular because of community live in
busy Change preposition
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life
they do not have much time to Fix the agreement mistake
lives
doing
activities. Change the form of the verb
do
As a result
, this
procedure has many positive developments rather than negative developments.Submitted by himalhi.deepthi on
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